ext_210138 ([identity profile] lalaith-raina.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] zhie 2008-04-23 05:17 am (UTC)

Ah, this was such a pretty 'set'.

I try, I really do, to find something to say to somehow help you better your writing. Yet I never find anything I can criticize.

There's so many, I'll just say I loved them all. It goes without saying I adored the Erestor/Glorfindel ones by now, I think. Let's see, anything I want to say specifically...

Secret. Just, wow. A good bit, and surprisingly under-written. It makes such sense - how could you not harbor a bit of anger to a man you trusted as a brother, who is now stealing a sibling from you for eternity. And also nice to, in the name of secrets, not let you know who's talking.

I giggled to think Elves play Trust games as well. Sweet mercy I hate those activities. Because you always end up feeling like an idiot. Always.

Fear - seriously, Fin. Just pounce him and be done with it. But darn you, I was afraid enough of spiders - I'd never considered they could crawl in your hair!! D: -scratches head and flails hair about wildly-

You... hm. Was very pretty. I like the kind of rhyme-y feel it had. It also followed 'fear' very nicely.

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